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The Red Wheelbarrow by William Carlos Williams (Transcreation to Tagalog by Su Layug)

17 Thursday Sep 2026

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Today, I was delighted to discover that Poetry Foundation posted William Carlos Williams’ “A Red Wheelbarrow.” I’ve always wanted to translate/transcreate this poem. The challenge I had was multifold:

1. I didn’t realize until now that the poem had already been in public domain. Before that, translating it partially would’ve really done nothing since it’s very short.

2. So much depends (haha, yes, the phrase applies) on the transfer of the cadence and brevity of the poem, while, at the same time, delivering a statement to the target audience: my Filipino readers. Imagery alone, in my belief, would not make sense in the transfer of meaning and relevance. There has to be something else. A sort of touching base in that short burst of imagery.

3. It had taken me some (more) level of maturity to dare transcreate rather than merely translate poetry. These days, I look into finding resonance between the mundane and the transcendent. In this poem, I was trying to find the tie between the American ordinary and the Philippine everyday. Maybe these are my years of going back to my roots while struggling to stay anchored to the here and now. In the process, here is what I came up with:

NOTES:

  • A “kariton” is a makeshift pushcart made of pieces of wood, plyboard, metal and sometimes, tarpaulin. It is usually found on the streets of the metropolis, sometimes used for peddling goods, sometimes for collecting junk for repurposing, sometimes for keeping and transporting the personal belongings of a homeless person or family. Whatever can be found to put together a kariton is fair game. As a child, I have seen karitons that were partially made with plyboard used for placards and posters of politicians. As that same young child learning to read, I once got frustrated trying to make sense of a homeless person’s kariton that partially read: “Vote for P_” and below it “for Cong_.” As a young adult I found dark humor in the irony of politicians’ making good on their promise of offering “better lives” through their placard faces becoming truly helpful in the form of kariton.
  • “Paskil-paskil” (patched together) is a choice over “pula” (red) for the reason given above. The kariton would not be normally painted red, as the paint would have been an additional cost.
  • “Maya” (a common sparrow) was chosen over “manok” (chicken) because chickens are not normally found roaming the streets of Metro Manila. If there was one that ever got out of the cage on the way to the market to be sold, that chicken would not last an hour. Someone would’ve already caught that bird to cook as tinola for supper.
  • “Maya” as a reference to the common sparrow is an allusion to the Christian faith of Filipinos. Even as the kariton is a testament to resilience and adaptation to the sparseness of material things, the sparrow is a biblical reference to Psalm 84:3, which says, “Even the sparrow has found a home, and the swallow a nest for herself, where she may have her young—a place near your altar, Lord Almighty, my King and my God.” I am not a religious person, but many Filipinos are, and this transcreation is a commentary on that faith and hopefulness of the Filipino people. So much, indeed, depends upon the red wheelbarrow.

Use of AI disclosure: The wheelbarrow photo was an original photo by the author, partially AI-edited with Canva (app) to render suitable for juxtaposing the poem. The sparrow photo is an original photo by the author, NO AI WAS USED in the sparrows photo nor in the translation/transcreation of the poem.

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Hango: Tula ng Bagong Taon (Excerpt: New Year’s Poem by Margaret Avison)

03 Friday Jan 2025

Posted by Su Layug in Poetry Translation

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2025, birds, cosmic wisdom, death, Filipino, Filipino translation, flourishing, grieving, lark, life, Margaret Avison, mindfulness, new year, Poetry, recovery, renewal, snow, starling, swallows, Tagalog, Tagalog translation, translation, Winter

Translated to Tagalog / Filipino by Su Layug





  
          Naaalala ko
Ang bigat-balaning halimuyak ni Anne, ang di-matinag na puntod
Na mumunti lamang ang nakukupkop ng lamig;
Magiliw kong binabakas ang mga bungo at brasong buto
Mga anyong kinahig ng mga kulansiyang at langay-langayan, sa pagkuha nila ng rabaw,
At ang mahabang silo ng amihan
Nililinaw ang pagkurba ng arko nito, mula sa bituing Arcturus
Hanggang sa laryong kanto ng patyo,
At sa pasimanong walang-galaw.
Malumanay at makatarungang kasiyahan
bilang nilalang ang makamit mula sa kalawakan
Itong maligamgam at napagnanahanang kalooban
Na tahimik na sumasalamin sa sinag
ng (harayang) niyebe, at ng bagong taon.
             I remember   
Anne’s rose-sweet gravity, and the stiff grave
Where cold so little can contain;
I mark the queer delightful skull and crossbones
Starlings and sparrows left, taking the crust,
And the long loop of winter wind
Smoothing its arc from dark Arcturus down
To the bricked corner of the drifted courtyard,
And the still window-ledge.
Gentle and just pleasure
It is, being human, to have won from space
This unchill, habitable interior
Which mirrors quietly the light
Of the snow, and the new year.

Translator’s notes:

One of the challenges of translating from a language of one climate zone to another of a different climate zone is the concept of the seasons. The original English was clearly written in the context of the temperate zone of the northern hemisphere where snow commonly exists at the turning of the year, whereas Filipino / Tagalog is a language from a tropical climate. Two considerations:

1) the migration of birds, which is, to me, a central concept in the passing of time and the subtle shifting of sentiments, whether natural or induced, is seen by this translator as crucial in the portayal of emotional flourishing–and survival. The lark is perceived as the common-and-yet heroic bird, rising at the dawn of day, a natural bringer of joy with its songs, cited in many poetic lines, such as Shakespeare’s Sonnet 29. The starling, in contrast, is the less-than-heroic one which tends to be destructive to fruits and other vegetation, and yet is remarkable in its mimicry of other birds and sounds, as though such pretense is crucial for existence, even survival.

The translation, to Filipino, however, does not equate to the actual names of the birds. Though also migratory, the Philippine starling (kulansiyang) remains the less-than-heroic one, with its noise-making as its most recognizable feature, though not the mimicry of the northern hemisphere starling. The langay-langayan, which is the equivalent of the swallow (and not the lark), is the more graceful, poetic bird in this translation. It is usually associated with grace, hope, and renewal.

2) In translating “snow” I have opted to include the notion that “niyebe” (Spanish-derived word for “snow”) may be imagined as signified by the parenthesized word “haraya” (imagined). With this duality, the context then shifts back-and-forth from the experience of a Filipino who may have never left the Philippines, but is intellectually familiar with snow, to that of a Filipino who has migrated to a country where snow is a real experience. In either case, the experience of snow as part of the awakening, and/or survival/recovery/grieving/flourishing/renewal process, in its complexity, is real, whether to a migratory or a colonized mind, or both

The full English poem can be read here: https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/51733/new-years-poem?utm_source=Poetry%20Foundation&utm_campaign=bc1922be67-NO_TITLE&utm_medium=email&utm_term=0_ff7136981c-bc1922be67-185698833&mc_cid=bc1922be67&mc_eid=3b56d6ba23

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Hango: Salamin ng Lumbay (Excerpt: Melancholy’s Mirror by Robert Cording)

11 Sunday Feb 2024

Posted by Su Layug in Poetry Translation

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death, Filipino, Filipino translation, grief, literary translation, melancholy, Poetry, Robert Cording, Tagalog, Tagalog translation, translation

A Translation from English to Filipino by Su Layug

Kabilang ako ngayon sa sarili kong anatomiya ng lumbay—

Sa tagal nitong paghihintay sa hindi mangyari-yari

Sa pagtrangka nito sa kinabukasan. Sa pagkaalam nito

sa lagpas-kamatayan na hanggang doon na lang

ang alam. Ang pagkainutil nitong kumpletuhin

ang buhay na basta na lamang nagwakas. Imahe ni Durer,

may pakpak ngunit paralisado, napupung-aw, nakalatag

ang mga kagamitan sa harap niya, ngunit hindi makalikha. Ang mga salitang ito

na wari’y mga insektong nagkukubli ngayong dapithapong taglamig.
I belong today to my own anatomy of melancholy—

its long wait for what never happens.
Its shut down of the future. Its after-
knowledge of death that knows no more
than it did before. Its inability to complete
a life that simply ended. Dürer's figure,
winged but paralyzed, moping, tools spread
before him, but unable to create. These words
that lurk like insects this winter late afternoon.

Translator’s Notes:

1 “Hindi mangyari-yari” — the repetition of the root word, “yari” (to happen) at the end denotes the (non-) fruition of the action verb “happen.” (“that never happens”). An alternative is to say “hindi mangyayari” (will never happen) but the earlier phrase, “hindi mangyari-yari” suggests a recurring wish for something to happen, and the recurring end-result of that something never happening.

2. What I found especially difficult to translate are the lines, “Its after-/ knowledge of death that knows no more / than it did before.” The question arises: what does “that” refer to?” Does it refer to “melancholy,” to which the persona belongs to, and thus represents them? Or does it refer to “after-knowledge” (that knows no more than it did before)? I took the liberty of interpreting “that” as referring to “melancholy” which existed before and after the death being talked about. Thus, the Filipino translation, “sa kaalaman sa lampas-kamatayan” (the knowledge of (what is) beyond death) “na hanggang doon na lang ang alam” (which is its (melancholy’s) limit of knowing)

3. Through Cording’s article (a personal essay, its link below), which I found online after writing this translation, we can confirm that this poem is an autobiographical one — that, indeed, it refers to the death of Cording’s son. The poem refers to the visual artist Albrecht Dürer‘s work Melencolia (1513/1514) in the last stanza. The grief of the persona due to the death of his son is juxtaposed with his grief of not being able to create, juxtaposed with the realization that his son, himself, will no longer be able to create, his life having been taken too soon.

4. I chose to say, “Filipino translation,” rather than “Tagalog translation” because I chose to use the word, “napupung-aw” (moping, being melancholic) which is not Tagalog, but Bicolano — the native language of my late mother. I wish I learned her language more.

This is the link to the whole poem in English: https://poems.com/poem/melancholys-mirror/
This is the link to Robert Cording’s personal essay, In the Unwalled City: https://imagejournal.org/article/in-the-unwalled-city/

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A Friend of Mine (Aking Kaibigan)

11 Thursday Jan 2024

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#Friendship, #Unrequited Love, FilipinoSong, FriendofMine, Love, music, OdetteQuesada, Tagalog, translation

Composed and sung originally in English by Odette Quesada, translated to Tagalog and sung in Tagalog by Su Layug.

Lately I find myself translating English songs to Tagalog. I find this task extra challenging on a couple more levels than translating poetry. My self-imposed challenges are the following:

  1. Transfer of meaning: the meaning of the song must be preserved as much as possible in a culturally resonant way, meaning, the translated lines must sound as though they were written in the target language.
  2. The phrasing must fall naturally, as much as possible, for singability.
  3. If possible, maintain a rhyming scheme, again to contribute to the translated song’s singability. And the most challenging and rewarding one:
  4. The translation must have a turn of phrase or two that is poetically particular to the target language.

The originally English song that I’m featuring here was composed, recorded and immortalized by Odette Quesada — an icon in the Philippine music industry. I chose this particular song as my first (public) adventure in song translation because it has a personal back story, not in the sense of the song’s meaning – a one-sided romance between two friends – but in the twists and turns of friendship and romance that childhood friends sometimes get intertwined in. Many times, these love triangles are not as obvious as the coming-of-age Hollywood movies portray them to be, nor quite as well-defined as the triangle imagined by the non-recipient of the unrequited love. In any case, I’d like to think that in such love-and-friendship stories, friendship ultimately prevails, as it is, in many times, greater and more enduring, than romantic love.

Aking Kaibigan 

Kaibigan ka noon
Kaibigan pa rin ngayon
Hanggang kaibigan na lang nga ba tayong dalawa?
Mahal kita noon
Mahal pa rin ngayon
Ngunit gayunpama’y kaibigan lang pala.
Pag-ibig mo’y sa kanya lang,
Pag-ibig ko’y sa iyo laan
Ngunit kapag malungkot ka,
Lagi akong nandiyan
Ako ang siyang takbuhan mo,
Kakwentuhan ng lambingan niyo,
Ngunit di mo man lang pansin
Ang damdaming nananaig
Sa iyo’y nananabik
Ngunit heto pa rin ako.


Excerpt of the original English, A Friend of Mine
Music and lyrics by Odette Quesada

I've known you for so long
You are a friend of mine
But is this all we'd ever be?
I've loved you ever since
You are a friend of mine
But babe, is this all we ever could be?
You tell me things I've never known
I've shown you love you've never shown
But then again, when you cry
I'm always at your side
You tell me 'bout the love you've had
I listen very eagerly
But deep inside you'll never see
This feeling of emptiness
It makes me feel sad
But then again, I'm glad

To put to the test the viability of the translation, I sing the translated song in a lower key than the original singer does (I am an alto).

Here’s a link to Odette Quesada’s Facebook, where a video of her recent rendition of this song in the original English is posted: https://www.facebook.com/odetteq

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