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Sheltered Garden (excerpt)
by H.D. (American poet, novelist, and memoirist,1886-1961)

For this beauty,
beauty without strength,
chokes out life.
I want wind to break,
scatter these pink-stalks,
snap off their spiced heads,
fling them about with dead leaves—
spread the paths with twigs,
limbs broken off,
trail great pine branches,
hurled from some far wood
right across the melon-patch,
break pear and quince—
leave half-trees, torn, twisted
but showing the fight was valiant.

Halamanang Ligtas (hango)
(translated from English to Tagalog by Su Layug)

Dahil nakakasakal
itong kagandahan, 
itong kagandahang walang lakas.
Nais ko’y buwagin
at ikalat ng hangin ang mga bulaklaking tangkay, 
pugutin at ipaghahagis nito ang mahahalimuyak na buko at pigtas na dahon –-
ikalat ang mga baling kahoy, itong mga braso,
sa mga daanan,
hilahin nito ang mga sanga ng pino
na binalibag mula sa kagubatan,
at kaladkarin sa taniman ng mga milon,
biyakin ang mga peras at kamyas –
iwanang hatí ang mga puno, wasák at pilipít
bagama’t kapuna-punang sila ay magiting na nanlaban.


The full poetry in English can be found here:
https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/48189/sheltered-garden


Translator's Notes:
1 "Chokes out life" was simply translated to the equivalent of "choke" in the sense of asphyxiation, thus the Tagalog "nakakasakal" (choking). It is understood that the goal of the action is to kill someone or something, albeit here, it is figurative. The other consideration was "kitlin ang buhay" (kill the life) because the word "kitil" is normally used with the word "buhay" (life) thus, structurally approximates "chokes out life." However, "kitil does not have the specificity of "sakal" (choke).

2. The motif of physical violence that runs through the excerpt is maintained by using the equivalent violent words, as follows:
*snap off their spiced heads = pugutin (chop off the head) ang mahahalimuyak na buko..." (chop off the fragrant buds), 
*spread the paths with twigs/ limbs broken off, = ikalat ang mga baling kahoy, itong mga braso (these arms), / sa mga daanan, 
*trail great pine branches,/ hurled from some far wood/ right across the melon-patch=
hilahin nito ang mga sanga ng pino/ na binalibag mula sa kagubatan/ at kaladkarin sa taniman ng mga milon, with the word "kaladkarin" (drag with a sense of violence) as a more intense redundancy of "hilahin" (pull or trail)

3.The fruit quince does not have a Tagalog equivalent. The translator used "kamyas" a more sour cousin to the sweeter star fruit (balimbing). The "kamias," although it may be eaten raw, is better consumed cooked, because of its tartness, much like the quince.